雅思G类大作文高分范文及逐段分析-孩子玩具多的优劣
雅思G类大作文高分范文及逐段分析-孩子玩具多的优劣！剑雅官方说明：这是由雅思考官撰写的very good answer，只是多种高分作文的一种形式。更多雅思写作干货请关注环球教育，更多雅思提分课程，可以咨询网站客服老师，直接预约试听哦
题目：
Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with.
What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys?
题型：优劣分析。这种问法实际考试已很少见到，通常是问outweigh.
关键词：parents，advantages, disadvantages, the child, a large number of toys
简析：问题里的“孩子”用了单数，要引起警惕和注意，在行文中注意要用相应的表达扣题。
范文：
It is true that many parents purchase a multitude of playthings for their offspring. Whether or not this is a good thing for the child, is a moot point. On the face of it the advantages seem most apparent, but could there be a downside to this phenomenon of devoted parenting as well?
Many people would consider children who have many toys to be the fortunate ones. Interesting things to play with stimulate many positives in the young boy or girl, such as optimum brain development, hand-eye coordination and colour recognition, apart from the simple joy of playing. Modern toys are designed to be educational as well as fun, and concerned parents select products which might speed their children's acquisition of numbers or the alphabet.
Is it possible that owning multiple toys could be in any way detrimental to a child? This is an unusual question, but there are some hidden pitfalls. For one, wealthy parents might spoil their son or daughter by showering him/her with toys, resulting in a negative effect on the child's character. For another, a growing child's concentration span may suffer if they are constantly surrounded by too many tempting objects, so that they become unable to focus on any one game for a decent length of time before being distracted. On the social side, older children may become targets of envy from classmates, if they are perceived as having far more possessions than their peers. Finally, the majority of toys today are made of plastic which commonly contains the chemical BPA, proven to be dangerous for infants to suck on or ingest.
It is clear then that this situation is not as straightforward as it first appears. It would seem that one of the many duties of parents is to make an informed choice about how many toys they buy for their young ones.
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结构分析：
结构内容和观点
开头段改写题目，引出讨论。
第一段孩子有很多玩具的好处。
第二段孩子有很多玩具的坏处。
结尾段总结自己观点。
观点积累（TR）：
有很多玩具对孩子来说
观点 角度
好处 寓教于乐 功能
坏处
影响性格 个性
影响孩子注意力 能力
影响同学关系 人际
玩具的材质可能造成危险 健康
同义替换（LR）：
题目关键词同义替换/指代
some parents：
many parents
devoted parenting
concerned parents
wealthy parents
children：
offspring
older children
infants
young ones
child：
young boy or girl
son or daughter
a growing child
toys：
playthings
interesting things to play with
modern toys
products
tempting objects
possessions
buy：
purchase
select products
shower
a large number of：
a multitude of
many
multiple
far more...than
the majority of
advantages：
is a good thing for sb
stimulate many positives in sb
speed children's acquisition of
disadvantages：
a downside
be detrimental to
some hidden pitfalls
a negative effect on
may suffer
become unable to
be dangerous for sb to do sth
万用句型（TR、CC、GRA）：
1. It is true that...
‘确实是这样’，常用于段首，用于改述题目，呈现事实。
2.Whether or not this is a good thing for..., is a moot point.
‘这对谁来说好不好，是个争议点’，常用于开头段，用于改写题目，扣题。
3. On the face of it the advantages/disadvantages seem most apparent, but could there be a downside/brightside to this phenomenon of ... as well?
‘表面看来好处/坏处是最明显的，但是这种现象是否也存在缺点/优势呢’，常用于开头段，扣题，启下。
4.Most people would consider ... to be ...
‘多数人认为...是怎样的'，可用于主体段第一句，展开论述。
5. Is it possible that ... could be in any way detrimental to...?
‘某事是否可能对某人有害？’，可用于主体段第一句，展开论述。
6.This is an unusual question, but there are some hidden pitfalls.
‘这个问题比较罕见，但是确实有一些潜在的问题’，与上一句连接使用，用于展开论述。
7. For one,...For another...., On the social side, ... Finallly,...
一组顺序词/连接词，用于段落中列举ideas。
8. It is clear that this situation is not as straightforward as it first appears.
‘很显然情况不像乍一看那么简单’，用于优缺点题型的总结段，总结观点。
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