雅思G类大作文范文分析-健身房vs散步爬楼

　　雅思G类大作文范文分析-健身房vs散步爬楼  2020年2月其他考区出现的一道G类大作文主题是“最佳健身方式”。本期，组长搬运雅思学习网站howtodoiets范文并附分析，供大家参考DG类题目的结构及该话题的ideas和词汇。​

　　学习方法建议：认真审题，对照中文译文写出英文段落，然后与原文进行对比，看句式、用词上存在哪些出入和错误、原文的句型和词汇是否更准确丰富，做笔记，再次阅读原文。

　　Some believe that the best way to stay fit is to join a gym or health club while others think doing everyday activities such as walking and climbing stairs is enough.

　　Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

　　范文：315 words

　　标记说明：斜体为连接表达，下划线为话题词汇。

　　Many think that going to the gym is unnecessary and you can get in adequate shapesimply through your day-to-day routine. In my opinion, there are benefits to a generally active lifestyle but joining a gym is still the best guarantee of a basic level offitness.

　　译文：很多人认为去健身房没必要，日常锻炼就能保持足够好的体形。我认为，爱活动的生活方式是有好处的，但去健身房是保持身材的最佳方式。

　　解析：开头段2句话，第一句改写题目，第二句给出观点。DG类题目开头段第一句的写作方式有两种：一是People have different views about...，二是上述这种“用一方观点把两个部分连接起来”。使用第二种的话，要注意两个部分表达顺序与观点句的连接，即第一句话说A和B，第二句开头先说B再说A，这样CC更好。写作时，可以先确定个人立场/观点，再按照上述“模版结构”组织句子。这个开头段对题目词汇进行了充分的替换，请自行总结，目标7+G友尤其应注意要写出一个简洁、语法准确、内容扣题、词汇替换准确丰富的开头段。

　　The health benefits of everyday activities are apparent for those who are very active walkers. Doctors advise the average person to walk 10,000 steps a day to be healthy.These steps can now be easily recorded with a FitBit or Apple Watch, which means thatthere is less need than ever to set aside gym time. This clear goal can encourage individuals to become more aware of their daily habits and slowly change or supplement them. For example, instead of taking the elevator to one’s apartment or work, you can add a few hundred steps by taking the stairs. While at work you can walk around more often and all your progress will be digitally recorded. This dedication may become habit, eliminating the need for regular, dedicated workouts.

　　译文：日常活动在健身方面的好处对健步走爱好者是很明显的。医生建议普通人每天走1万步。现在用智能手表和手环就能轻松计步，不需要专门留出时间去健身房。这个明确的目标可以鼓励人们意识到日常习惯的重要性并逐渐改变或养成习惯。例如，你可以爬楼梯来多走几百步，而不是坐电梯回家或上班。上班的时候，你可以到处多走走，这些步数都会被记下来。这种坚持成为习惯就不再需要定期专门训练了。

　　解析：主体段1对应观点句前半部分。中心句意思清晰、统领全段，巧妙地把题目中的“日常活动”和“散步”结合了起来；第二句用一个常识来立论，延伸中心句提出的“walkers”，同时扣住了“日常”；第三句解释日常计步容易做到并与gym建立了关系，使用了比较级，FitBit和Apple Watch是举例；第四句继续拓展解释日常计步的好处-提升认识；第五句和第六句举例说明计步如何发挥作用，回应了题中的“爬楼”，扣题充分；最后一句总结日常计步的好处及其与去健身房的关系，扣住了题目。

　　Despite the advantages of walking detailed above, the gym nets more impactful results. The number one leading cause of death globally is heart disease and the only way to combat it is through dietary changes and exercise. Researchers have long extolled the benefits of aerobic exercise for heart health. The most effective aerobic workoutshappen at the gym on treadmills and ellipticals. Many doctors recommend that patients at risk of heart disease sign up for gym memberships and commit to a regular workout schedule as walking alone does not provide the intense workout required tostrengthen the heart and prevent early death.

　　译文：虽然走路有上述好处，健身房会更有效。心脏病是全球第一大死因，战胜它的唯一方法是饮食调整和运动。长期以来，研究人员一直在强调有氧运动对心脏健康的好处。最有效的有氧运动是使用健身房的跑步机和椭圆机。很多医生建议有心脏病风险的患者加入健身房并开始按计划锻炼，因为只是散步的话并不能提供强化心脏和预防早期死亡所需的锻炼强度。

　　解析：主体段2对应观点句后半部分。中心句承上启下、意思清晰、统领全段；第二句开始解释中心句中的impactful results，并把影响人群具体到心脏病患者；第三句继续解释运动的好处；第四句给出细节，指出有氧运动与健身房的关系，使用了话题词汇；第五句拓展解释健身房运动对心脏病的缓解作用，扣住了题目，这是全文最长的一个复杂句，目标7+G友要注意长句写作的准确性。

　　In conclusion, going to the gym is crucial to being in good shape. Healthy habits ranging from good nutrition to taking part in sports to making time for the gym are important checks against the inclination today towards a passive, sedentary lifestyle.

　　译文：总之，去健身房对保持身材很重要。健康的生活习惯，包括摄入营养、参加运动、去健身房都是与现在被动、久坐的生活 方式倾向对抗的重要做法。

　　解析：结尾段总结个人观点并拓展，充分回应题目。

　　小结：这篇作文结构清晰，开头改写恰当、观点鲜明，主体段分别提出了2个具体的观点并进行了充分的论述，结尾段再次扣题，全文观点清晰、一致，话题词汇丰富，语法准确多样，值得深入分析和学习、仿写。

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