剑16写作解析及高分范文 | TEST3 提高含糖食品价格

　　剑16写作解析及高分范文 | TEST3 提高含糖食品价格，这是一道观点类大作文，仔细看考题范文的同学会发现，这道题目和6月17日的题目很相似。都是说某类食物会导致健康问题，然后通过提高价格来让人们少吃已到达解决问题的目的。

　　观点类大作文，健康类话题

　　Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

　　题目来源：剑16Test3大作文

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　　题目大意

　　许多食品和饮料含有高的糖分，这会导致许多健康问题。含糖的产品应该更贵，以鼓励人们少吃糖。你同意还是不同意？

　　思路解析

　　审题要注意两点，一是讨论对象限定在“Sugary products”上，二是题目给出的逻辑“提高价格能减少人们摄入”。建议从反对的角度切入。

　　反对的原因在于，虽然经济学角度来说，提高含糖食品的价格可能会使得人们减少购买，进而达到少摄入糖分的目的。但是，很多含糖分的食品对人们来说是刚需，比如作为主食的面包（在国外面包是主食）、烧菜用的调味品等，提高这部分的价格可能并不会让人减少摄入，同时还会加重人们的经济负担，特别对于本身就贫穷的人来说，他们很难找到替代品。

　　而如果需要达到“让人少吃糖进而改善健康”的目的，可以有更多更好的办法。一是加大健康饮食的宣传，强调过度摄入糖分会对身体危害，改变人们的观念。二是可以通过政策奖励让企业生产更多健康的食物替代原来的高糖的食品，达到减少供给的目的，当市面上高糖食物供给减少后，人们摄入的量自然而然也就变得更少了。

　　高分范文示例

　　It is argued by some that we should make the prices of sugary products higher as a means of pushing people to intake less sugar, considering how more and more processed products consist of huge amounts of sugar which leads to multiple health problems. Personally, I completely disagree with this view, and would argue that it is neither right nor practical to try to raise the prices of sugary products.

　　On the one hand, it is undeniable that highly processed food and drink products can be a threat to modern citizens' health conditions. "Sugar is the new poison", as many would say. In order to improve the taste of these products, manufacturers often choose to add an unhealthily high level of sugar, which can cause mild addiction by spiking dopamine release in human brains according to multiple researches across the world. This method is so widespread that sugar can even be found in the least expected things, such as daily seasonings like vinegar and soy sauce. As a result, people today are consuming an excessive dosage of sugar that human bodies are simply not designed to cope with. After all, mass production of sugar only started several centuries ago, yet it took tens of thousands of years for our ancestors to develop the rewarding mechanism that we have in our brains today, which both helped our species survive in the Stone Age and is slowly killing many of us today.

　　With all that being said, I would argue that trying to raise the price of sugary products would be an effort in vain, which may even cause more serious consequences for society. First of all, sugary food and drink products are fast-moving consumer products, often consumed rapidly and priced low, which means that consumer perception of their price changes can be low. This is to say, most consumers are not likely to stop buying such products simply because the price has increased by 5 cents. For families with poorer financial conditions, the price changes might seem more obvious. However, while they can reduce the consumption of snacks, they cannot avoid buying daily products such as the sweetened seasoners mentioned above. Thus, the living cost of people will rise, and this may lead to serious problems for society.

　　In conclusion, I believe that we have no reason to try to intervene with the price of sugary products.

　　相关词汇和语法结构

　　consist of  由……组成

　　multiple health problems  多重健康问题

　　seasoning  调味品

　　an excessive dosage of sugar  过量的糖

　　cope with  应对

　　in vain  徒劳的，无意义的