雅思写作范文如何精读精析？剑桥雅思考官范文研读（选自剑桥真题5 task2）

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　　Writing task 2

　　In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.

　　Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.（选自： 剑桥真题5 task2）

　　Gap year的话题背景阅读：In the professional or career world, a gap year is a year before going to college or university and after finishing high school or taking a year off before going into graduate school after completing a bachelor as an undergraduate. It is also known as a sabbatical year. During this time students may engage in advanced academic courses, extra-academic courses and non-academic courses, such as yearlong pre-college math courses, language studies, learning a trade, art studies, volunteer work, travel, internships, sports and more.Gap years are sometimes urged as a way for students to become independent and learn a great deal of responsibility prior to engaging in university life.

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　　写作要点：题目要求同时讨论间隔年的advantages和disadvantages.

　　引言段：

　　It is quite common these days for young people in many countries to have a break from studying after graduating from high school. (首句改写提干，一个现象话的背景句：如今常见的一现象是越来越多的人会有间隔年在高中毕业后) The trend is not restricted to rich students who have the money to travel, but is also evident among poorer students who choose to work and become economically independent for a period of time.（此句对首句更进一步进行解释说明：不管学生的经济条件，很多人都会选择去间隔年，表明这种趋势的普遍性）

　　主题段1:直接给出支持间隔年的原因，即回答题目要求——间隔年的advantages

　　The reasons for this trend may involve the recognition that a young adultwho passes directly from school to university is rather restricted in terms ofgeneral knowledge and experience of the world ( 第一句直接表达了支持间隔年的原因，通过反证：那些没有经历gap year,从中学直升大学的人在生活常识和个人经历方面往往比较受限制) . By contrast, those who have spent some time earning a living of travelling to other places, have a broader view of life and better personal resources to draw on（此句通过对比论证：那些花时间去间隔年的人会有更广的视野以及更优的人脉资源）. They tend to be more independent, which is a very important factor in academic study and research, as well as giving them an advantage in terms of coping with the challenges of student life.（更进一步说明间隔年带来的优势：gap year的经历对于学术研究也有相关的好处，会让学生在应对学习研究生活的挑战方面更具有能力）

　　主题段2：转折到题目题目中要求讨论的间隔年的disadvantages

　　However, there are certainly dangers in taking time off at that important age（此段的topic sentence，有转折词引出间隔年的负面影响）. Young adults may end up never returning to their studies or finding it difficult to readapt to an academic environment（此句直接切入间隔年具体的问题：很多年轻人很难在专注于学习生活，回来以后发现自己再难适应学术环境）. They may think that it is better to continue in a particular job, or to do something completely different from a university course（进一步解释上一句话的原因，很多人认为还不如继续工作或者拥有一些和大学课程无关的经历. But overall,I think this is less likely today, when academic qualifications are essential for getting a reasonable career.(此句用but转折，反驳了以上对于间隔年可能带来的问题的担忧，因为如今想要一个不错的职业生涯，必然对于学术修养和资质有要求，所以不回校园现实的可能性也很小)

　　结论段：根据以上的论证作出了明确的结论

　　My view is that young people should be encouraged to broaden their horizons. (结论段直接切入个人看法：支持学生参与gap year.) That is the best way for them to get a clear perspective of what they are hoping to do with their lives and why(词句呼应了主体段第2段的内容，间隔年的具体的好处). Students with such a perspective are usually the most effective and motivated ones and taking a year off may be the best way to gain this.（最后回到主题，如果想要获得这些间隔年带来的好处，那么必然就有动力去gap year. 由此可见考官范文的完美逻辑，即前后呼应有强调了自己观点的合理性）

　　我们可以从整篇范文中借鉴考官写此类题型的的一个文章结构：经典的四段式：第一段由话题背景切入讨论的主题，没有给出个人的看法；第二段（即主题段第1段）按照题目要求讨论了间隔年的advantages；第三段（即主体段第2段）回答了题目中的间隔年的可能带来的问题，此段最后一句给下一段的个人结论做了小小铺垫，即这种常见的对于间隔年所带来的问题的担忧的现实可能性很小，也就是说这些问题在生活中不太可能发生，很明显可以得到最后一段（结论段）的个人的结论：间隔年的优势太明显了，因为它潜在的问题几乎不会出现。由此可见考官十分完美的完成了写作评分task response和coherence and cohesion(具体Linker的使用可对照文中圆圈符号)这两个标准。

　　重点句型和词汇表达：

　　It is quite common these days for sb. to do sth. ：往往作为背景句放在文章引言段作为开头：如今….（题目中的现象）十分常见和普遍。

　　Have a break from….. : 从…..终止暂停

　　The reasons for this trend may involve the recognition that+同位语从句（大多是陈述句）：这种趋势的主要原因在于这样的一个认识或者看法，后跟陈述句补充这种看法的内容。

　　By contrast （相反）,： 引出对比中的另一方。

　　They tend to be more independent, which is a very impor

　　tant factor in academic study and research, as well as giving them an advantage in terms of coping with the challenges of student life.：Which跟之前的句子陈分之间用逗号隔开，非限制性定语从句，which指代前面的they tend to be more independent；which后面的句子则补充说明他们更独立这件事情会带来的好处，as well as的用法类似于and,但是后边不跟完整的句子。

　　end up doing sth. ：以….告终的意思

　　sb find it adjective (difficult) to do sth. ：某人发现做某事是怎样的（adj.）注意句中的it是形式宾语，代指句子后边的to do th.

　　My view is that …..(+陈述句) ：此句为表语从句，可以直接引出个人看法

　　get a clear perspective of sth…. :对某事物由清楚明白的了解看法

　　broaden one’s horizon: 拓展某人的视野

　　economically adv.：经济上地；经济方面地

　　independent adj.:独立的

　　restricted adj. 有限的，受到限制的

　　a period of time:一段时间

　　readapt to …. :再次适应…

　　academic adj.：学术的

　　essential adj.：必要的；重要的

　　motivated adj.:有动力的

　　completely adv.:完全地