2019年11月日雅思写作考试点评分析:A类小作文
【作文类型】柱状图(动态)
A类大作文
【作文题目】 In some cultures the old age is highly valued, while in some cultures think the youth is highly valued. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
【考题和关键词解析】
本考题在考查范围上有所定位, 用了"valued"这个词。此题属于"Discuss类", 有两个方面, 在论证时需要运用对称式写法。
【全篇段落提纲】
开头段: (铺垫背景, 引出话题)
在不同的社会和文化背景下, 公众对老年人和年轻人的重视度有所不同,必须承认双方都各有价值和优点。
people from dissimilar backgrounds may have divergent attitudes towards the same issue with respect to the value of the old and youth respectively.Admittedly,there are merits concerning both sides.
主体第一段: (a. 指明老年人的价值和优势b.重视老年人的原因或目的)
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a.饱经风霜
Having experienced and endured all the hardships of life
富有经验,知识广博
sufficiently experienced and well knowledged
怀旧,懂得珍惜,容易满足,更能吃苦耐劳,更加理智
reminiscent-inclined, more sensible to cherish easily contented, bear hard work, more reasonable
有丰富的人生观和价值观
abundant philosophy , social values and outlook on life
社会责任感强
strong sense of social responsibility
b.
充分开发老年资源(Well explore the resources of the old),提高老年人生命和生活质量,构建和谐社会,促进人口老龄化与经济、社会协调发展,实现社会可持续发展。实行积极的老龄化对策:健康、参与和保障。
enhance the life expectancy and standard to construct a harmonious society which promotes the coordinate growth of economy and sustainable development as well,with the implement of positive countermeasure involving health, participation and insurance
主体第二段: (a. 指明年轻人的价值和优势; b. 重视年轻人的原因或目的)
a.
有活力的, 精力充沛,可塑性强
dynamic,energetic,moldable
富于创新、勇于挑战
innovative,challengeable
善于学习和接受新事物、新想法
be adept in learning and adopting up-to-date objects and notions.
独立性强,有幽默感和灵活性,有上进心,independent, with sense of humor,flexible,striving
接受了更好的教育,有竞争意识和合作意识,better cultivated, with competitive and cooperative spirit
熟知科技知识,善于沟通交流
well-informed of advanced technology, skillful in communication
b.
给社会发展注入新的动力和提供更广阔的空间novel motive power for social advancement with a wider range
创造出更多的挑战和机遇
create more challenges and opportunities
鼓励年轻人致力于奉献社会,实现人生目标和社会价值
encourage youth to devote themselves to society for the sake of achieving life goal and social value
结尾段:折中的写法(重申老年人和年轻人各有不同价值,都应受同等的重视)
各自有不能比拟的优点和不可取代的价值,不应偏颇对待
On account of the incomparable advantages and irreplaceable value possessed by the old and youth respectively, special importance deserves to be attached to both accordingly to an identical extent rather than prejudiced.